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Subj: Here's the problems I have with it:
Posted: Fri Feb 01, 2008 at 07:20:02 pm EST (Viewed 425 times)
Reply Subj: Maybe...(everyone should read this)
Posted: Fri Feb 01, 2008 at 06:11:56 pm EST (Viewed 462 times)

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> ... But unless the Moderator recovers from this death, I think you may have just prevented anyone else from writing any further tie-ins to this story.

Actually I wrote a follow-up, in a way.  Several days ago Ian posted a chapter noting at the end that it's about time we wrapped this up.  Almost a week passed with no more posts so I took the initiative.  :)

It's also a follow-up because it fits a small status-quo set up by Hatman-poster:  That after the Moderator is fought and beaten, evil-Jay would take a bid to sieze power.

Also, people kept telling me (and I think you hinted at it too) that the female associates of the Legion never get a chance, and that perhaps this is the chance.  I took that opening.  

I didn't even start writing this until late Thursday night, and finished it today just before posting it.  At first I assumed since Ian usually takes the lead posting conclusions, I'd let him do it.  When he posted something else, I took a chance.

I hope it doesn't upset anyone.  I just took the opening offered to me when nobody else stepped up (in fact, the characters in the story subtly imply they "may be all that's left"), because I wanted to see things move forward.  If the point was for someone else to finish it, and everyone was supposed to wait for that person to do it...sorry, I guess I missed a memo.  

I'll give it a couple of days, and if there are too many objections I'll pull this story off the board and wait for someone else to do the job.



1. It starts with the Moderator already having taken over the cosmic offices, which was pretty obviously meant to be the worst case scenario everyone was trying to prevent, which is precisely why we had the countdown to it as a climactic moment. The fact that you skipped over it made me feel like I'd been cheated out of that essential part of the story.

2. The Moderator has persecuted the entire Parodyverse, and the characters created by all of its posters, but in the end, he's defeated exclusively by your characters - which, quite frankly, reads as rather selfish, regardless of your intent. It renders all of the tie-ins that the rest of us have been writing up to this point completely pointless, even if you suddenly try and slot evil-Jay into an archvillain role, because nothing that any of our characters did contributes to the Moderator's defeat, and the name of the story is "The Moderator Saga," so once he's defeated, everything after that is simply a post-script to the true story.

3. In my opinion, you've chosen extremely inappropriate characters to suddenly be thrust into huge roles. Evil-Jay is an interesting idea, but he is not the main archvillain that all of our characters have been struggling against since this story began, so he has absolutely zero dramatic weight as a substitute archvillain, and if you really do intend to have him take the Moderator's place as the main archvillain, then it pretty much kills off my interest in seeing how this series turns out. Ditto your decision to turn Anna into the Shaper of Worlds, because of all your characters, she's the least well-defined, beyond how special she is, and part of the whole point of this entire story, as evidenced by the fact that the Moderator has been fighting for more than two-dozen chapters of it to gain the powers of the cosmic offices, is that cosmic offices should NOT just automatically fall into someone's lap, as they did with Anna here.

I understand your desire to see the story move on, but if the moves you've made in this chapter are meant to be permanent, then you haven't moved it toward a conclusion - you've ENDED it, in a way that, again, leaves no possibility whatsoever for the rest of us to complete our character arcs.

I hate to sound so harsh, but that's how I see it.



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