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Subj: One need not be young to make bad decisions Posted: Thu Dec 08, 2016 at 03:03:14 pm EST (Viewed 2 times) | Reply Subj: keg stands and bad decisions- ah, to be young again Posted: Thu Dec 08, 2016 at 01:31:38 pm EST (Viewed 2 times) | ||||||
Quote: So far I'm enjoying the charming story of the LL Juniors and their reconnaissance mission to the Heckfire fraternity- "world leaders of tomorrow." I like the euphemisms for supervillians and seemingly naiveté of Velvet. I'm not familiar with much of the backstory but I'm able to follow along well enough. Well, there's a massive weight of Parodyverse backstory that threatens to make everything inaccessible to any but a very tiny group of long-term fanatics (and even their memories must be getting fuzzy by now), but I am trying to make sure that neccessary information is included in the main narrative. Quote: Your writing is pretty smooth and you created a fun picture of impulsive youth. I'm wishing I'd proofread the thing a bit better, though. I've just browsed it again and spotted about 20 mistakes including wrong names and some text actually omitted by my HTML errors.I'm wishing I'd proofread the thing a bit better, though. I've just browsed it again and spotted about 20 mistakes including wrong names and some text actually omitted by my HTML errors. | |||||||
