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Subj: The question mark is part of a theme. Posted: Wed Dec 12, 2012 at 01:19:24 pm EST (Viewed 665 times) | Reply Subj: I'll need to reread the various parts consecutively to see how they flow and pace, but this is certainly good setting-setting. Posted: Mon Dec 10, 2012 at 07:37:57 am EST (Viewed 3 times) | ||||||
Quote: What I mean is that you're currently doing a very strong job of painting in the characters and making us invest in them. I'd need to read the story as a whole before I could say whether the reader would be wanting something to blow up to punctuate the exposition. I think it's okay, but that's something I always have to watch for in my writing.I personally found it more interesting to create a hold-your-breath moment. I hope it worked.  I wanted it to look really dangerous, but then show how restraint won out. Next time it may not.Quote: In a novel revision there's always the option to cutaway to other cast too, such as showing the bad guys laying out their schemes.That's in the next part. | |||||||
