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Subj: I'll try and restore they hyphens to their former glory Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2010 at 08:47:59 pm EDT (Viewed 2 times) | Reply Subj: Part 2 comments... Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2010 at 06:22:20 pm EDT (Viewed 992 times) | ||||||
Quote: One thing I noticed in both parts Ham-Boy's hyphen seems to be floating in out of his name. It's not a big thing just something I noticed.I'll see to it. Quote: But getting to the actual story: I'm sort of surprised HB didn't use a sausage link rope to get down into the cave but Sally works just as fine. I'd think HB might be a bit nervous using her as rope, he might not be so sure as where it was ok to put his hands.  I think the distance was sufficiently great to make the risk of the rope a bit too great. Think something about three skyscrapers high. As for Sally, I was thinking about how mr Fantastic wraps his arms around people when he's being a parachute. Quote: Also, some good lines both here & in the last part. It shows that the group is playing well off each other.I'm still trying out what works and what doesn't. It's a fun but hard writing task. Quote: I looking forward to seeing what else the team find in the tunnels & what Mumph is up to.The LL are working their way towards the people who financed the hit on HB. | |||||||
