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Reply Subj: Short change Posted: Wed Apr 21, 2010 at 04:30:17 pm EDT (Viewed 7 times) | |||||||
Quote: As I was saying to Vizh, the challenge with this story is graduating Hodgekiss' confrontations. The danger is that otherwise the tale degenerates into a series of angry reactions which don't really add much to the overall narrative.I meant that Hodgekiss didn't seem to react at all to Anna's name. Like either he ignored it on purpose because he knew CSFB! was trying to irritate him, or he didn't care. Quote: You may wish to wait for how this plot with the Hood pans out since it may make a difference to other stories about it.I posted it anyway - not to mess up the Hooded Hood's plot, but because after reading it I realized a large portion of the first chapter of Mysteries of Faite started in the recent past (ending right around the time Anna, Lara, Chiaki, and Liu Xi returned home). Quote: As the Word said here, the Hood is making his move. As usual, that's a carefully considered suite of ploys. And there are particular and as-yet-unrevealed reasons why he's in a somewhat uncompromising mood, even beyond having to sacrifice Zdenka recently.For that, Faite might remind him to remember who his allies are, or at the very least, who his enemies aren't. She doesn't rely on threats - she tries to appeal to his intelligence. Quote: G-Eyed and Liu Xi share a similar problem just now of being anomalies without poperly rooted timeline histories.The point was that Liu Xi has heard it before and doesn't really worry about it. Quote: Amber's resignation has triggered his conversation with his dead girlfriend Izzy, so now his plot can move forward.I didn't know she was dead. That kind of changes things, because the dead can be manipulated. Quote: I take it as a good sign regarding whether the story's engaging readers that so many people are itching to have their characters help out CSFB!Like I said, Lara is biting her tongue because she's afraid of what telling the truth will cause. She knows just how dangerous CSFB! can become if he's out-of-sorts enough to believe Lara is saying that because she's turning against him, or if he believes all his friends are. | |||||||
