> > This is the second time I'm typing this out. My 2 year old Nephew pressed the power button on the computer turning it off just before I was about to post my comments. So, I'm going to try & remember what I wanted to say.
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> I actually have the plastic top off a Smarties tube blu-tacked over my power button from the days when the kids were younger.
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Well, I think I should have been paying more attention to him & not the screen.
> > Having the LTCSF in Comic Book Limbo makes so much sense!
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> It's all part of the master-plan.
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It wouldn't expect any less from you.
> > One thing you need to change: Once Griffin touches down on the ground you wrote that he meet up with Ronnie. But Ronnie is up in the Helicarrier not on the ground, Chad is! So, I think you just switched the names around.
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> Yep. I keep confusing those two's names for some reason.
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Well, normally they are together & so a slight name confusion can slip by but since they are separated it's more apparent.
> > Stuff that needs to be resolved before this is all over:
> > - I think there needs to be a Funeral for a Friend. As I have stated a small tribe of people had found Chad's Accordion. In there culture: if you don't know what it is, you eat & hope it doesn't kill you. So, The Accordion has been mostly eaten & makes it's unusable for Chad. Since it meant some much to Chad, a funeral must been done. If you want to add this into the main story: Cool! If not, just mention it & I'll do the honors.
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> I think you should do the honours. It's a seminal moment for your characters.
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Ok. I guess your right.
> > - I think the subplot with Catherine needs some sort of wrap up. I've had some thought about the men who fished her out of the harbor, not sure what they'd talk about be it seems unfinished. I'm also thinking there might needs be a thing with Mr. Spooky. Not sure what but again seems unfinished.
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> We can probably run Mr Spooky's involment over into the last phase of the adventure, after we've resolved the Land that Common Sense Forgot and the World Without heroes.
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Ok.
> > Lastly, I have an epilogue idea where Ronnie relates his adventures to Jane. I'll do that one.
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> Jolly good.
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Thanks.
> > I think that was all I had to say.
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> Okay then.
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> > EDIT: I thought of something else! The stuff you did with Lee was really interesting! Kind makes me wondering if their will be any lingering effect on either part?
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> Well, the effect on that Space Fandom is that he's dead. As for Lee, that's for you to say. I do expect to chronicle a conversation between him and Marie about it sometime.
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Uh... I think you have what I'm trying to say confused with something else.
