Tales of the Parodyverse >> View Post
Post By
L!

Location: Seattle, Washington
Member Since: Sun Jan 04, 2004
Posts: 1,038
In Reply To
L!

Location: Seattle, Washington
Member Since: Sun Jan 04, 2004
Posts: 1,038
Subj: Comments post reading the story....
Posted: Sat Mar 08, 2008 at 05:05:05 pm EST (Viewed 587 times)
Reply Subj: Uh.. Mr. Waston, sir. I have found a possible small problem with the story...
Posted: Sat Mar 08, 2008 at 04:14:24 pm EST (Viewed 522 times)

Previous Post

Now I haven't read the story but there is a problem in your recap:

> Ben Hermes, Semi-Transparent Lad, was drafted as a Moderator minion in this new reality.

Ok. That's right. Hermes was remade as an Agent of S.P.A.M.

> After a run-in with Kat Gillespie where he decided to let her go he now seeks only to escape the Iowa compound if he can find a vehicle to get away in.

But, Ben never had a "run-in with Kat". Kat clashed with another remade Hero of mine: Fred Harris a.k.a. Ham-Boy.

More comments regarding this story will follow after I finish reading it.

As always: an interesting read. A bit confusing in parts, but then battles can be confusing with all that is going on.

In reading the story, I think I have figured out a way I can explain the whole HB/STL mix up, no need to change anything on your part. The use of C-Class as S.P.A.M. agents was inspired, I hadn't even thought of that.

Not really sure how I'll resolve Kat in all this. Her being at the final fight of The Moderator seems odd to me. I still need to figure out a way to explain Mr. Spooky's appearance & cryptic message to the young Miss Gillespie. Then there a few other things to work with or around. But, then that not for you to figure out: it's mine.

I look forword to seeing what you prestn with us next. Maybe something about the Hood's Daughter?