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Al B. Harper
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CrazySugarFreakBoy!

Member Since: Sun Jan 04, 2004
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Subj: A short story but packed with good characterisation!
Posted: Wed Dec 12, 2007 at 09:25:48 pm EST (Viewed 1 times)
Reply Subj: Hawk & Cougar: Homelands & Couplings (A Short Story Starring Mr. Epitome & A CrazySugarFreakGirlfriend!)
Posted: Wed Dec 12, 2007 at 08:30:45 pm EST (Viewed 458 times)


Real good bits were Epitome's thoughts on Dream:

> I think he’s using you, and her. I think he sees women as action figures, to play with and add to his collection, and I think you deserve better, than to let yourself get taken advantage of by someone who’s a child compared to you.”

And of course Bettie's rational.

> In turn, since I am an adult, I trust he will respect that, what I do, I do with my eyes open.”

This does a lot to opening her up as a character one can understand and relate too.

Well done.

Al B.