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Subj: I think a much easier solution ...
Posted: Sun Sep 09, 2007 at 01:51:27 am EDT (Viewed 411 times)
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Posted: Sun Sep 09, 2007 at 01:03:54 am EDT (Viewed 403 times)

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As you might have noticed this chapter takes a bit of a risk with Akiko Masamune.  It's not easy to tell, but there is a part 3 to this story - she doesn't just vanish to the Safe when part 2 comes to an end.

The point of the overall story is to end the Psychic Samurai's dependence on her criminal underworld connections.  It's one of those situations where they've served her well so far but you knew sooner or later there would be a conflict.  Well here it is.

A secondary point is that after Hatman took down the Lynchpin and the streets were left in disarray by that, and by the Parody War, there's a lot of opportunity for crime families.  The best spoils go to the most aggressive, and there are new players like the Zoot Suit Gang gaining fast.  It can be supposed, then, that Akiko has had to become more aggressive to protect her territory and expand.  And while she's friends with the Psychic Samurai, Chiaki's association with the Lair Legion makes her less than reliable for help.

Meanwhile though because the reaction to Part 1 seemed to be neutral, and Part 2 negative so far, I'm going to be watching for further opinions.  If it's turned off too many readers, and I get the overwhelming impression that nobody cares what part 3 is like after reading part 2, I may scrap part 3 and consider removing part 1 and 2 as well.  If I do that it'll be the first time I've ever had to axe an entire multi-part story, and I hope it's the last time I have to.

I guess this goes back to a problem I talked to Ian about in a reply thread once - that I have a very small personal cast, and whenever I write a multi-part story it usually involves outside characters.  If that becomes increasingly hazardous (either because I take too many risks or because other characters become too wrapped in other stories) I may have to avoid writing anything "integrated" for a while until I can come up with my own complete cast first.




... As Vizh suggested earlier, is simply to send other folks a heads-up via e-mail, if you have something significant or potentially status-quo changing that you're planning on doing with their characters. With some stories I've written, I've traded e-mails with half the board, and bouncing ideas off of them has always helped me tell better stories, not just about their characters, but also about my own.

With Akiko, it's a bit more complex, since she's a Non-Poster Character, which technically makes her community property, but as far as I know, Vizh and Ian have written the most stories about her, so however your story turns out, it might not be a bad idea to get their ideas on how Akiko might tend to react to certain situations.

You can still sell a story that takes risks, as long as the characters seem to be behaving in ways that most people can recognize, but I think the biggest problem with this chapter is that the personality you portray Akiko as having runs counter to the way that a number of posters, myself included, are inclined to view her character.