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Hatman

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Subj: Any time JJJ contributes, it's bound to be good
Posted: Sat May 15, 2010 at 10:36:43 pm EDT (Viewed 520 times)
Reply Subj: A truly outstanding chapter!
Posted: Sat May 15, 2010 at 10:28:34 pm EDT (Viewed 488 times)



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    I really like how you dealt with the aftermath of the epic confrontation with the Obliterator, especially the views from the citizens. You managed to make me really angry at the Abandoned Legion's callous disregard for the damaged caused, even when I didn't give it a second thought as it was happening.


Well, to be fair I don't think I spent enough time on the lack of concern for the public in the battle scenes; I hinted at it a couple of times but I probably should have spent more time on it. Part of this chapter is me making up for that.


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    Chiaki was my first guess at this Citizen Z's identity after the clues that had been laid out before, but I had no idea what the motive for her would have been. Akiko wanting to know more about the gangland killings makes perfect sense, and I feel like I should have worked that out before.


There is actually more to Akiko's motives than simply gathering intel; more on that later.


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    I did like seeing the honest (by comparison) Abandoners working to save the public while Doorman grandstanded. I'm looking forward to them coming for him after he set them up. Provided they don't come for Hatman instead...


So far I think Killer Shrike is the only truly honest member of the Abandoned Legion, which is kind of scary when you think about it.

We also have to see what happens with Harvester and Anvil Man yet too.


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    Great stuff! Bring on more.


Glad you liked it!

~Hat~




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