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Anime Jason
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Subj: Need a product tohelp with those hard-to-remove stains?Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 at 08:50:44 am EDT
| Reply Subj: Brains and blood everywhere. Posted: Sat Jun 14, 2008 at 02:11:14 am EDT (Viewed 687 times) |
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> Someone else might mention at some point, or it might just be me, but at the beginning of Anna's scene it's difficult to tell if Griffin is there or not at first. Not really a big deal, but if you say something about it here then people will read my reply thread and not need to repeat it again.
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I'll need to look at that sometime and see if I can't make the text alterations clearer. The whole of this chapter suffered from having to be recovered line by line from a dozen or more different cached versions after a computer crash scrambled the Word file, and from me deciding the split the chapter into three chapters for the sake of readers' sanity.
> And of course now I need to know if Anna is parked in the ducts of the helicarrier until I do some kind of tie in or if you're dealing with that part. She's going to really put her mechanical abstract brain to the test on this one, which is what I was hoping for. It's unacceptable to bring down the helicarrier and crash it, and it's also unacceptable to kill everyone and take control of it. She'll have to really be creative, like Yuki told her to do.
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There's still all the rest of the material you sent me to use. It's all worked in, but with me splitting the story up into three daily chapters it's not all included in this first episode.
By the end of the three parts the helicarrier situation will be resolved and we can all move on to new crises.
> It brought a smile to my face that it seems Yo is doing the same thing Faite did during the Moderator saga. Faite would probably be amused too.
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Yo is slightly more contrained, in that people can only exit the Happy Place at the exact spot they entered it.
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