> ... The story itself is interesting, but I think the repercussions of this on Akiko will either require an extended explanation of why she suddenly behaved this way, or else she'll have to be revealed to have been Not Herself. I didn't feel like there was enough justification for Akiko to turn child-kidnapper, either in terms of her character or what she actually thought she was going to accomplish, and by taking her off the board, you've potentially affected a lot of other writers' stories.
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There will be a part 3, if that's what you mean.  I'll add a writer's note shortly.
