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Al B. Harper - throws in some plot just for fun
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Subject: The 10 Year Anniversary Round Robin continues...
Posted Fri Sep 26, 2008 at 02:58:12 pm EDT (Viewed 1 times) |
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“Come on!†Magweed grabbed the hands of both her brother, and her friend - Samantha Featherstone, and started dragging them out of the room and down the long central hall of the mansion.
“Where are you dragging us?†asked Sam, almost tripping on the tasselled end of a rather expensive carpet that ran half way down the length of the hall in front of them.
“And why can’t we hear the rest of Dancer’s ‘talk’ to Kerry?†Griffin interjected as he looked sadly back at the room he had just been yanked from.
“Because, there’s something strange going on,†the young girl answered, “and it will be up to us to sort it out as usual.â€Â
“You mean stranger than Rocket Racoon and the Wooster sisters doing that funny dance with the Mexican sombrero and the tub of mayonnaise?†Samantha asked as Magweed dashed her and Griff down a side corridor.
“And stranger than Yuki Shiro and Daddy and the Manga Shoggoth and Danny Lyle playing twister?†asked Griffin.
“Yes!†exclaimed Magweed, cajoling the tow of them into a small room. “And dangerous too.. probably.†she said in all seriousness.
The room she had led them was a small computer access point in the east wing of the mansion, dimly lit in a greenish hue from the computer screen set atop a fancy mahogany desk that flickered in front of the three young adventurers.
Magweed rushed over to it and pressed a few buttons, and with an audible crackle the air coalesced in front of them all into the holographic form of Hallie.
“What is it sweetie?†Hallie asked. “Got tired of the party?â€Â
“Ahh…no…we’re just…can we access the Legion files?†Magweed stumbled out. “There are just some people here I don’t know.â€Â
Hallie waved a holographic hand. “They’re yours to explore sweetie,†she said. “Now if you’ll excuse me I have to go and have words with your father about something. Just call if you need anything.â€Â
Magweed bit her lower lip and nodded quickly as Hallie’s form shimmered out.
“What’s this all about Meg?†Samantha asked as a look of concern spread over her face.
Magweed dashed off a few more buttons and a holographic representation of the main reception hall sprang to view. She used the computer to angle the camera here and there – past ManMan in the punch bowl, past the Bonsai Kittens and CSFB!, past Hatman and Sir Mumphrey and Asil and George Gedeny before it seemed to settle in a corner of the room.
“Can you see her?†Magweed asked her two companions – pointing to the corner on the holographic screen.
“See who?†Griffin asked – with a tinge of annoyance in his voice.
Samantha just shook her head in the negative.
“There’s a girl there, in black clothes, with a sad look to her face. Like a goth or an emo. I don’t think anyone can see her. But I can.†Magweed implored to her two companions. “I see her clearly.â€Â
“Really?†Griffin asked staring intently at the screen. “Who is she?â€Â
“I don’t know.â€Â
“Ah!†Exclaimed Sam, “hence the request to use the Legion files!†She was now catching up to Magweed’s thoughts and pressed a few buttons. “Computer – access Legion files – cross reference powered individuals “goth†and “emoâ€Â. She looked to Magweed as the computer files searched the database.
Magweed smiled slightly at her friend and nodded. “Exactly!â€Â
The computer flicked up its first match as the bio-data of Urthula Underess appeared on the screen.
Magweed shook her head. “Nope – it’s not her.†She said looking at the still seemingly empty corner in the other holographic screen.
“Temporary Death!†Griffin read out as the next match appeared – but Maggie shook her head again.
“Her!†she suddenly exclaimed as the next match showed up.
“Necromancer Jane?†queried Samantha, reading out the name.
“Apparently she is an Australian superpowered who aided the Lair Legion during the Parody Master’s attack on her homeland.†Griffin said reading quickly.
“With the power to raise the dead to fight as her legions. It says she raised the dead of a whole cemetery that was on the cliffs of Sydney to fight off the Avarwarriors.â€Â
“But what is she doing here, now?†Samantha asked.
“And why isn’t Marie going bananas!†Griffin pondered.
â€ÂAnd why I am the only one who can see her?†Magweed queried.
“That, sweetie, is a very good question†an icy cold female voice responded.
The three young adventurers all jumped at the voice and turned quickly to see two figures standing in the doorway. One, a blond in a bright blue body suit was obviously the woman who spoke. And the other, with his back towards them as he shut the door looked like Hatman.
“Hatman!†Samantha exclaimed – but the rest of the words died in her mouth as the man turned around. For while he wore the exact clothing of Hatman, once he faced them the subtle differences became apparent. For one – he had a small little black beard and moustache. Second – instead of the familiar H on his hat – there was a C.
If there was any doubt that this fellow was not Hatman despite appearances it was soon dashed once he spoke in a thick French accent.
“I am not zat fool Hatman! I am ze Homme de Chapeau!†The crusty fellow exclaimed with a twirl of his French moustache.
“And that’s the last thing you shall hear before you die!†Menaced the blond woman icily.
The Homme de Chapeau locked the door behind him and grinned wickedly at the young heroes as he and his companion approached them with evil intent.
To be continued…maybe…
Footnote: Ok – I haven’t written the scene where Necromancer Jane fights off the Parody Master’s goons yet – but it happened. Trust me. She was seemingly on the side of the angles then – albeit all emo about it. Just what she and blondie and Hatman’s evil French twin are doing here remains to be seen…or it could just be one of those weird What If’s if people don’t care. 
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Subject: Another one? [Re: Al B. Harper - throws in some plot just for fun]
Posted Fri Sep 26, 2008 at 05:05:47 pm EDT (Viewed 435 times) |
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Doorman & now Homme de Chapeau: Why does Jay get all the doppelgangers?
Nice nice story none the less. Don't worry that Jane's fight has been written, I've had tons of stuff happen to characters that haven't been in a story.
Also, you have a small mistake in your footnote: You say that "She was seemingly on the side of the angles". I think you meant to type "Angels" & not "Angles" but someone fighting on the side of Angles would be interesting to see & would totally fit in with the PV.
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Subject: Gah! Plot! [Re: Al B. Harper - throws in some plot just for fun]
Posted Sat Sep 27, 2008 at 01:28:04 am EDT (Viewed 389 times) |
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Interesting... I never could have seen the French Hatman coming! Well, okay, maybe I could have. L's right.... there sure are a lot of 'em. Being a Hatman be a franchise opportunity.
Fun (and mysterious) stuff! I look forward to the next bit to find out more about these interlopers.
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CrazySugarFreakBoy!
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Subject: Yeah, [spoiler] seems to be racking up evil twins lately. ;) [Re: Al B. Harper - throws in some plot just for fun]
Posted Sat Sep 27, 2008 at 01:35:38 am EDT (Viewed 404 times) |
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HH
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Subject: We still need that Bonsai Kitten-focussed story. [Re: Al B. Harper - throws in some plot just for fun]
Posted Sat Sep 27, 2008 at 07:00:09 am EDT |
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> “Come on!†Magweed grabbed the hands of both her brother, and her friend - Samantha Featherstone, and started dragging them out of the room and down the long central hall of the mansion.
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> “Where are you dragging us?†asked Sam, almost tripping on the tasselled end of a rather expensive carpet that ran half way down the length of the hall in front of them.
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> “And why can’t we hear the rest of Dancer’s ‘talk’ to Kerry?†Griffin interjected as he looked sadly back at the room he had just been yanked from.
>
> “Because, there’s something strange going on,†the young girl answered, “and it will be up to us to sort it out as usual.â€Â
>
> “You mean stranger than Rocket Racoon and the Wooster sisters doing that funny dance with the Mexican sombrero and the tub of mayonnaise?†Samantha asked as Magweed dashed her and Griff down a side corridor.
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> “And stranger than Yuki Shiro and Daddy and the Manga Shoggoth and Danny Lyle playing twister?†asked Griffin.
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> “Yes!†exclaimed Magweed, cajoling the tow of them into a small room. “And dangerous too.. probably.†she said in all seriousness.
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> The room she had led them was a small computer access point in the east wing of the mansion, dimly lit in a greenish hue from the computer screen set atop a fancy mahogany desk that flickered in front of the three young adventurers.
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> Magweed rushed over to it and pressed a few buttons, and with an audible crackle the air coalesced in front of them all into the holographic form of Hallie.
>
> “What is it sweetie?†Hallie asked. “Got tired of the party?â€Â
>
> “Ahh…no…we’re just…can we access the Legion files?†Magweed stumbled out. “There are just some people here I don’t know.â€Â
>
> Hallie waved a holographic hand. “They’re yours to explore sweetie,†she said. “Now if you’ll excuse me I have to go and have words with your father about something. Just call if you need anything.â€Â
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> Magweed bit her lower lip and nodded quickly as Hallie’s form shimmered out.
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> “What’s this all about Meg?†Samantha asked as a look of concern spread over her face.
>
> Magweed dashed off a few more buttons and a holographic representation of the main reception hall sprang to view. She used the computer to angle the camera here and there – past ManMan in the punch bowl, past the Bonsai Kittens and CSFB!, past Hatman and Sir Mumphrey and Asil and George Gedeny before it seemed to settle in a corner of the room.
>
> “Can you see her?†Magweed asked her two companions – pointing to the corner on the holographic screen.
>
> “See who?†Griffin asked – with a tinge of annoyance in his voice.
>
> Samantha just shook her head in the negative.
>
> “There’s a girl there, in black clothes, with a sad look to her face. Like a goth or an emo. I don’t think anyone can see her. But I can.†Magweed implored to her two companions. “I see her clearly.â€Â
>
> “Really?†Griffin asked staring intently at the screen. “Who is she?â€Â
>
> “I don’t know.â€Â
>
> “Ah!†Exclaimed Sam, “hence the request to use the Legion files!†She was now catching up to Magweed’s thoughts and pressed a few buttons. “Computer – access Legion files – cross reference powered individuals “goth†and “emoâ€Â. She looked to Magweed as the computer files searched the database.
>
> Magweed smiled slightly at her friend and nodded. “Exactly!â€Â
>
> The computer flicked up its first match as the bio-data of Urthula Underess appeared on the screen.
>
> Magweed shook her head. “Nope – it’s not her.†She said looking at the still seemingly empty corner in the other holographic screen.
>
> “Temporary Death!†Griffin read out as the next match appeared – but Maggie shook her head again.
>
> “Her!†she suddenly exclaimed as the next match showed up.
>
> “Necromancer Jane?†queried Samantha, reading out the name.
>
> “Apparently she is an Australian superpowered who aided the Lair Legion during the Parody Master’s attack on her homeland.†Griffin said reading quickly.
>
> “With the power to raise the dead to fight as her legions. It says she raised the dead of a whole cemetery that was on the cliffs of Sydney to fight off the Avarwarriors.â€Â
>
> “But what is she doing here, now?†Samantha asked.
>
> “And why isn’t Marie going bananas!†Griffin pondered.
>
> â€ÂAnd why I am the only one who can see her?†Magweed queried.
>
> “That, sweetie, is a very good question†an icy cold female voice responded.
>
> The three young adventurers all jumped at the voice and turned quickly to see two figures standing in the doorway. One, a blond in a bright blue body suit was obviously the woman who spoke. And the other, with his back towards them as he shut the door looked like Hatman.
>
> “Hatman!†Samantha exclaimed – but the rest of the words died in her mouth as the man turned around. For while he wore the exact clothing of Hatman, once he faced them the subtle differences became apparent. For one – he had a small little black beard and moustache. Second – instead of the familiar H on his hat – there was a C.
>
> If there was any doubt that this fellow was not Hatman despite appearances it was soon dashed once he spoke in a thick French accent.
>
> “I am not zat fool Hatman! I am ze Homme de Chapeau!†The crusty fellow exclaimed with a twirl of his French moustache.
>
> “And that’s the last thing you shall hear before you die!†Menaced the blond woman icily.
>
> The Homme de Chapeau locked the door behind him and grinned wickedly at the young heroes as he and his companion approached them with evil intent.
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> To be continued…maybe…
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> Footnote: Ok – I haven’t written the scene where Necromancer Jane fights off the Parody Master’s goons yet – but it happened. Trust me. She was seemingly on the side of the angles then – albeit all emo about it. Just what she and blondie and Hatman’s evil French twin are doing here remains to be seen…or it could just be one of those weird What If’s if people don’t care.
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Al B. Harper
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Subject: And Visionary is to blame for both - no really. [Re: L!]
Posted Sat Sep 27, 2008 at 09:34:24 am EDT |
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> Doorman & now Homme de Chapeau: Why does Jay get all the doppelgangers?
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V first gave us Doorman and in a way his magical drawing computer tablet is responsible for Homme de Chapeau as well. It's all his fault.
> Also, you have a small mistake in your footnote: You say that "She was seemingly on the side of the angles". I think you meant to type "Angels" & not "Angles" but someone fighting on the side of Angles would be interesting to see & would totally fit in with the PV.
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Yes, a typo - well spotted. But to win the no-prize you have to explain who or what the Angles are...
Al B.
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Al B. Harper
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Subject: But only a small side plot - the whole plotless party can still go on and others are encouraged to write plotless party scenes. [Re: Visionary]
Posted Sat Sep 27, 2008 at 09:38:14 am EDT |
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> Interesting... I never could have seen the French Hatman coming!
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I'm sure you could have.
> Well, okay, maybe I could have.
There you go.
> L's right.... there sure are a lot of 'em. Being a Hatman be a franchise opportunity.
Well, this guy looks like Hatty but we don't know his powers...yet.
> Fun (and mysterious) stuff! I look forward to the next bit to find out more about these interlopers.
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I'll post it once I write it. Flying home today so the weekend will be spent hurtling through the air in a metal tube which is not nice - but sometime after that.
Al B.
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Al B. Harper - write us a chapter Kirk! It's the Anniversary Party!
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Subject: Is he evil - or just French? It's hard to tell the difference sometimes. [Re: CrazySugarFreakBoy!]
Posted Sat Sep 27, 2008 at 09:39:37 am EDT |
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Al B. Harper would be worried his attempt at plot has failed if he worried about these things.
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Subject: And there's another vote for less plot... [Re: HH]
Posted Sat Sep 27, 2008 at 09:41:17 am EDT |
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HH
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Subject: No, I love plot. I'm fascinated to see where you go with it. [Re: Al B. Harper would be worried his attempt at plot has failed if he worried about these things.]
Posted Sat Sep 27, 2008 at 09:57:59 am EDT |
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It could explain why there's so many dead and missing characters around and nobody's noticed it.
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Al B. Harper
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Subject: Now seeing where I go with it is something to worry about. [Re: HH]
Posted Sat Sep 27, 2008 at 10:11:11 am EDT |
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> It could explain why there's so many dead and missing characters around and nobody's noticed it.
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*nods* That's the idea.
I'd appreciate any feedback or insight on how to write Sam (and the same from Vizh on Maggweed and Griffin) - so feel free to comment on anything glaringly incorrect or not right as the story progresses.
If I have time before I fly out I will post another chapter.
Al B.
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HH
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Subject: Proceed [Re: Al B. Harper]
Posted Sat Sep 27, 2008 at 10:28:13 am EDT |
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> I'd appreciate any feedback or insight on how to write Sam (and the same from Vizh on Maggweed and Griffin) - so feel free to comment on anything glaringly incorrect or not right as the story progresses.
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> If I have time before I fly out I will post another chapter.
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dull thud
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Subject: Yay for plot. Especially this one. [Re: Al B. Harper - throws in some plot just for fun]
Posted Mon Sep 29, 2008 at 03:06:47 pm EDT (Viewed 352 times) |
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Subject: Hatman really needs to see a good copyright lawyer. [Re: Al B. Harper - throws in some plot just for fun]
Posted Fri Oct 10, 2008 at 04:29:43 am EDT |
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> “Come on!†Magweed grabbed the hands of both her brother, and her friend - Samantha Featherstone, and started dragging them out of the room and down the long central hall of the mansion.
>
> “Where are you dragging us?†asked Sam, almost tripping on the tasselled end of a rather expensive carpet that ran half way down the length of the hall in front of them.
>
> “And why can’t we hear the rest of Dancer’s ‘talk’ to Kerry?†Griffin interjected as he looked sadly back at the room he had just been yanked from.
>
> “Because, there’s something strange going on,†the young girl answered, “and it will be up to us to sort it out as usual.â€Â
>
> “You mean stranger than Rocket Racoon and the Wooster sisters doing that funny dance with the Mexican sombrero and the tub of mayonnaise?†Samantha asked as Magweed dashed her and Griff down a side corridor.
>
> “And stranger than Yuki Shiro and Daddy and the Manga Shoggoth and Danny Lyle playing twister?†asked Griffin.
>
> “Yes!†exclaimed Magweed, cajoling the tow of them into a small room. “And dangerous too.. probably.†she said in all seriousness.
>
> The room she had led them was a small computer access point in the east wing of the mansion, dimly lit in a greenish hue from the computer screen set atop a fancy mahogany desk that flickered in front of the three young adventurers.
>
> Magweed rushed over to it and pressed a few buttons, and with an audible crackle the air coalesced in front of them all into the holographic form of Hallie.
>
> “What is it sweetie?†Hallie asked. “Got tired of the party?â€Â
>
> “Ahh…no…we’re just…can we access the Legion files?†Magweed stumbled out. “There are just some people here I don’t know.â€Â
>
> Hallie waved a holographic hand. “They’re yours to explore sweetie,†she said. “Now if you’ll excuse me I have to go and have words with your father about something. Just call if you need anything.â€Â
>
> Magweed bit her lower lip and nodded quickly as Hallie’s form shimmered out.
>
> “What’s this all about Meg?†Samantha asked as a look of concern spread over her face.
>
> Magweed dashed off a few more buttons and a holographic representation of the main reception hall sprang to view. She used the computer to angle the camera here and there – past ManMan in the punch bowl, past the Bonsai Kittens and CSFB!, past Hatman and Sir Mumphrey and Asil and George Gedeny before it seemed to settle in a corner of the room.
>
> “Can you see her?†Magweed asked her two companions – pointing to the corner on the holographic screen.
>
> “See who?†Griffin asked – with a tinge of annoyance in his voice.
>
> Samantha just shook her head in the negative.
>
> “There’s a girl there, in black clothes, with a sad look to her face. Like a goth or an emo. I don’t think anyone can see her. But I can.†Magweed implored to her two companions. “I see her clearly.â€Â
>
> “Really?†Griffin asked staring intently at the screen. “Who is she?â€Â
>
> “I don’t know.â€Â
>
> “Ah!†Exclaimed Sam, “hence the request to use the Legion files!†She was now catching up to Magweed’s thoughts and pressed a few buttons. “Computer – access Legion files – cross reference powered individuals “goth†and “emoâ€Â. She looked to Magweed as the computer files searched the database.
>
> Magweed smiled slightly at her friend and nodded. “Exactly!â€Â
>
> The computer flicked up its first match as the bio-data of Urthula Underess appeared on the screen.
>
> Magweed shook her head. “Nope – it’s not her.†She said looking at the still seemingly empty corner in the other holographic screen.
>
> “Temporary Death!†Griffin read out as the next match appeared – but Maggie shook her head again.
>
> “Her!†she suddenly exclaimed as the next match showed up.
>
> “Necromancer Jane?†queried Samantha, reading out the name.
>
> “Apparently she is an Australian superpowered who aided the Lair Legion during the Parody Master’s attack on her homeland.†Griffin said reading quickly.
>
> “With the power to raise the dead to fight as her legions. It says she raised the dead of a whole cemetery that was on the cliffs of Sydney to fight off the Avarwarriors.â€Â
>
> “But what is she doing here, now?†Samantha asked.
>
> “And why isn’t Marie going bananas!†Griffin pondered.
>
> â€ÂAnd why I am the only one who can see her?†Magweed queried.
>
> “That, sweetie, is a very good question†an icy cold female voice responded.
>
> The three young adventurers all jumped at the voice and turned quickly to see two figures standing in the doorway. One, a blond in a bright blue body suit was obviously the woman who spoke. And the other, with his back towards them as he shut the door looked like Hatman.
>
> “Hatman!†Samantha exclaimed – but the rest of the words died in her mouth as the man turned around. For while he wore the exact clothing of Hatman, once he faced them the subtle differences became apparent. For one – he had a small little black beard and moustache. Second – instead of the familiar H on his hat – there was a C.
>
> If there was any doubt that this fellow was not Hatman despite appearances it was soon dashed once he spoke in a thick French accent.
>
> “I am not zat fool Hatman! I am ze Homme de Chapeau!†The crusty fellow exclaimed with a twirl of his French moustache.
>
> “And that’s the last thing you shall hear before you die!†Menaced the blond woman icily.
>
> The Homme de Chapeau locked the door behind him and grinned wickedly at the young heroes as he and his companion approached them with evil intent.
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> To be continued…maybe…
>
> Footnote: Ok – I haven’t written the scene where Necromancer Jane fights off the Parody Master’s goons yet – but it happened. Trust me. She was seemingly on the side of the angles then – albeit all emo about it. Just what she and blondie and Hatman’s evil French twin are doing here remains to be seen…or it could just be one of those weird What If’s if people don’t care.
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